wolverine
By: William Shelley /12/15/10
Wolverine’s height at about let’s say either close or is six feet tall. Then there is his build he is kind of like bulky like very well built you can see his veins when he pulls out his claws. Because of wolverine’s healing factor and his adamantium laced internal skeleton he doesn’t even look any older when he ages. Plus he fought in wwI and in Vietnam also in wwII what else would someone who can’t die because of his healing factor and claws do but fight for his country. Wolverine’s face is kind of ovaly shaped it’s hard to tell because of his hair. His eyes are kind of the same color as mine hazel brown but he also has that mysteriousness about them. Wolverine’s hair is like kind of wavy and really spiky kind of like batman’s ears. His clothes are like scruffy looking because of all the fights he gets into he wears a white muscle shirt with rips in it he also wears blue jeans with a black leather belt that has a first nations chief head buckle.
William,
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A lot of sentence structure issues. This makes it really difficult to read your description with any kind of flow. I had to keep re-reading sentences to understand them. Self-editing and peer editing would help with this.
You use some good descriptive words.
17/25